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Lemonade Girls Detective Agency Open in new Window. [ASR]
A lemonade stand turns out to be a secret business
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I love a good children’s story, and this is quite nice. You’ve played up all the childish aspects of it and provided us with a perfect limited POV of the little girls as they attempt to solve mysteries from their lemonade stand. I was unsure of how “serious” the mystery would be, and was relieved to see that the kids didn’t actually get involved with anything criminal. I grew up reading Nancy Drew and Hardy Boys, Three Investigators and Trixie Belden, but as I’ve grown up and matured I’ve realized how incredibly dangerous and ridiculous it is to tell kids that other kids have solved big important criminal cases and involved themselves in matters of life and death.

Anyway, it’s an excellent story, full of realistic characters that leap amusingly off of the pages, from the singsong Carol’s mom to the jovial neighbor and his lovable beagle who finds the missing teddy bear. You’ve described everything clearly and vividly in simple terms, and even included a photo that makes me wonder if the story is at all based in real life memories. Size 4 Verdana font would be nice to ensure readability and accessibility across devices.

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