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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby

A Review From The Iron House Of Braavos

Title: The Sand Castle

Hi Huntermoo: I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: I like sand castles and beaches. This got my attention so I thought I would read this and give you my views as I got lost in the ocean and my imagination. Poseidon. I like that part as well. Ocean roars. So, I am ready and here are my thoughts.

What needs your attention: I was hoping you would see a dolphin swimming pass. Maybe a boat sailing past. The focus was on sand castle and the beach so I get this. I smiled.

The part I liked best: The open ocean roars in dragon's garb of green. I like the dragon reference. Turrets and oysters. Were thee any pearls? The call of retreat. The castle falls. Too bad sand castles don't last. A warrior guise. Good call. I feel like I was there. Some lovely reflections.

Overall Impression: I like all the imagery and description. A god style an easy to follow. Creative and colorful. Looks like you enjoyed writing this. Salt and spray through the air. A good part of the beach. I can see the ocean green like a dragon. This poem made me smile. Anyone who loves the beach needs to read this.

The views and opinions are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore do not reflect necessarily to the activity, group, and/or event being affiliated within. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it still up to the author to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.