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 Dance Open in new Window. [E]
A dance of life and death.
by Andante Author Icon
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Review by Krista Kringle Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This poem paints a vivid and mesmerizing picture of a young maiden's mystical dance amidst nature, transitioning seamlessly from serene elegance to fierce determination. The imagery of a waterfall of frosted moonlight and diamond-studded skyevokes a sense of enchantment and wonder, setting the stage for a magical encounter.

You’ve skillfully captured the delicate balance between stillness and movement, using phrases like motionless for a heartbeat to convey a sense of suspended time before the maiden's dance begins. The incorporation of nature's elements, such as the ancient trees and leaves spiraling upwards, adds depth and richness to the scene, immersing the reader in the ambiance of the forest.

As the dance progresses, the mood shifts dramatically as the maiden transforms from a graceful dancer into a fierce warrior. The contrast between the fluid movements of the dance and the swift, precise actions of combat creates a sense of tension and intensity, culminating in a breathtaking display of skill and strength.

The poem's structure and rhythm mirror the ebb and flow of the maiden's movements, with flowing verses that reflect the fluidity of her dance and shorter, more staccato lines that capture the urgency of her battle. The repetition of phrases like and she danced to its tune and her task fulfilled lends a sense of ritualistic significance to the maiden's actions, reinforcing the idea of her as a mystical guardian of the forest.

Overall, you’ve crafted an excellent poem- I can't think of any suggestions to improve it! Thank you for sharing this with us. Write on!

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