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Hi Keeper of the Realm

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Inner Demons

First Impression: I welcomed the darkness with the author. Darkness is a place I feel safest. I've raised a glass more than once welcoming the demons knowing I'm stronger most the time and when I'm not I know there's a thin line that I'm not ready to cross.

What needs your attention: In the sixth stanza in this line Where have you been?! You have an exclamation point after the question mark. I think the question mark works best.
The opening line of the third stanza feels out of place for this reader. There's no other indication of sparkle to balance.

What part I liked best: This author found the full circle of the poem with all is calm. We all desire calm within our self imposed walls but it's a struggle. I'm all too aware of the keeping facades in place because life isn't fair. It sucks.

Overall impression: The author created movement from stanza to stanza allowing the reader glimpses of the struggle with her demons. The only line that gave this reader pause was noted above. The opening stanza and the end stanza being the same served the poem well.

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