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Review #4742719
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 Eternal Life Open in new Window. [ASR]
Written for the "Share Your Faith" activity
by NaNotatoGo! Author Icon
Review of Eternal Life  Open in new Window.
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Hello NaNotatoGo!

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2024Open in new Window..


*Penw* Positives

Thanks for sharing your faith with us! I'm only tangentially familiar with the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day Saints, so it was really interesting to get to know a little more specifics about your particular expression of faith and how it compares to some others (e.g., non-denominational Christians, Catholics, etc.). You did a great job of breaking down the different types of afterlife one can look forward to (or not) based on your faith tradition.


*Penw* Suggestions

While the first half of the piece felt really well-organized and well-presented, the second half of the item felt a little scattered. There were only brief comments on the concepts of "loopholes" to your religious tradition's rules, a quick reference to your own experience with reproductive health struggles and not knowing what that means for your faith, and that the concept of "Hell" in your faith tradition is not the same thing as what others believe. Each of these feel like "big" topics that could have used a little more explanation to fully give the reader context for what's so different about your religion.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading this item and thought you did a good job responding to the prompt. Nice work! *Smile*


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