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 Life in USA Open in new Window. [E]
Life in the USA is characterized by diversity, opportunity, and resilience.
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Hello Elvins,

Welcome to our wonderful community. We have a page listing the recent work of new members. Yours piqued my interest because it was designated as an article, an essay as you noted, which is apart from the majority of writing I have looked at here. One of the main focuses of WdC is to read and review each other's work. Since you only posted it about forty-five minutes ago, I would guess it is surely your first review here.

Overall impression: Wow! Just wow! You have met every requirement of an essay. The topic is relatable to those of us citizens from the United States. A worldwide site, you will meet writers from countries like England, India, Australia, and New Zealand. Your presentation frame is excellent. It is easy to read with your topics well defined.

I see definite signs of a proficient wordsmith and thus, I appreciate your word selections that were uncannily and specifically "right on." With each topic, I related and felt proud to be an American. I would love this piece to be presented to those citizens who disrespect the flag, country, and President of the United State. The qualities you list combine to paint a positive and accurate picture of the USA.

One thing that stood out, and it may be just my preference, using the phrase "rich tapestry" not only in your opening but two more times. Rather than using the same description, it might work better, at least for me, to come up with a couple of new phrases. For example, in "Social Dynamics and Community Life" I would suggest something like "a resounding plethora of social dynamics and community life."

Mechanically your essay is flawless. It is a huge wonderful plus for me to read without any pauses for errors. I hope you read it out loud as I did. It flows so well, in addition to communicating a positive "tapestry" of the American way of life.

Congratulations on a work well done. I look forward to new work of this high caliber. Welcome again and know you are a valuable asset to our community.

Write on!
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