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 Review #4742697 |
 | Dirty Room with TV  [ASR] Life story in miniscule chaos anarchy  |
| (5.0)   Hello G.D.Evans, Welcome again to WdC, our abbreviation for our website. I saw your piece "Dirty Room with TV" on the Reviewing Newbies' page. I have read it and now will proceed to review it. One of the main focuses here at WdC is to read and review each other's work. Overall impression: This poem is begging to be used as rap lyrics. You may think about following up on the idea of following the process of having your lyrics adopted by a major rap singer. The topic of smoking, drugs, and filth resonates with that musical genre. I was prepared for the tenor of your entry from the specific genres you assigned to it. I liked the raw honesty you presented. My favorite line was about the "hate police" practicing tough love on you. You provided strong imagery with phrases like "having a brain dead head" and "my ego is excrement" The self-hate and tremendous regrets of what life choices you made, that are now wreaking havoc on your health, gave me pause to think about how closely this relates to my own life's journey. A breast cancer survivor, I now face breathing issues which give me limitations to my quality of life. Your genre choices are ideal. One thing I put a lot of weight on is the genres you select which draws in readership. They are used by members, editors, and selections people will go to read, as a favorite genre, and when they are a method for members to select work they may want to nominate for a Quill award. Being new, you may not yet be aware of this honor awarded usually once a year. The awards are selected from anonymously nominated work in a couple of scores of headings like Best Short Poetry, and Best Medium Poem, for example, The Quill I am drawn to is Best Reviewer which I recently was awarded for 2023. Thank you for writing something that lays open your struggles. I felt honored to read it. Continued luck with your writing. You have demonstrated a unique and desirable lyrical poetic style. Bravo! Write on! tracker
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