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Hello GhostlyPotato welcomes October

I'm sending this review in connection with "Game of Thrones.


*Penw* Positives

You did a great job of bringing the critical issue of climate change to the attention of the reader in a concise and efficient way. I like the mix of present-day anecdotes, as well as historical parallels; it really ties the piece together and gives the reader a clear sense of this problem both past and present.


*Penw* Suggestions

I think some additional context about what "Cells to Singularity" (the thing that you're encouraging the reader to try out, alongside visiting a natural history museum and talking to climate scientists.

It would also benefit the piece to have a few more specifics or statistics to back up the assertions being made. For example, what makes it an unprecedented wildfire season in Canada? Is it the number of fires? The extent of them? Both? Similarly, what do you specifically mean by "it won't be pretty" when wildfires increase via climate change? Some additional specifics would be helpful in order to give the reader some additional context.


*Penw* Overall

Overall, I thought this was an intriguing and interesting article on one of the most important ecological issues of our time. It was well written and concisely written, which helps keep the reader's interest throughout. Nice work!


Respectfully,

Jeff
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