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Rach's Chocolate Emporium  Open in new Window. [13+]
A place to purchase reviews, merit badges, and awardicons. We also sell yummy chocolate.
by Choconut Author Icon
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, Choconut!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This is a unique idea and a beneficial activity for anyone looking for an original way to reward other members.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
Who doesn't love a chocolate shop? The title is great, and the description lays out exactly what shoppers can buy for their hard-earned GPS. Very well done!

*Checkb*Content and Flow:
The page is laid out beautifully, with lots of eye-catching visuals. It's easy to understand and to the point. Once you get into the packages, the images are stunning, and the point-form layout of what you get in each package is fantastic. Having just purchased something from the shop, I noticed that the switch from the bargain basement to the next level shows a huge gap in the required GPS. Upon further inspection, I see that the gap isn't nearly as big as I thought. Instead, it's a matter of how the items are arranged. I wonder if putting them in ascending order of cost would help. You could still highlight your new package, but having the 50k one underneath would bridge the gap between the two levels.

Although maybe I'm the only one who thought I had to spend 20k OR over 100k *Laugh*. That wouldn't surprise me in the least.

I also like that you have price points in the low 20k categories, as it makes it easier for shoppers with a limited budget to grab a little gift when needed. Conversely, it's great that you also cater to 700k+ customers who can do their one-stop shopping without having to piecemeal a bunch of stuff together. Overall, it's a very clever storefront.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
I found no problems in this area. The copy is clean and well-formatted.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
While there are usually a few options for straight raffle tickets or auctions, this is a nice change for gifting purposes. With the wide assortment of goodies and varied price points, it has something for everyone. Thank you for filling this niche at WdC!

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*


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