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A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Hi KS23. I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Best Part Of My Day

First Impression: I started to read this and this person parks their car and decides to jog instead of drive. I was wondering if he or she would have an adventure. I was ready to see what happens next. I decided to get right into this. I am relaxed and ready to do this.

What needs your attention: I think you have this covered. I guess you don't want to say what state this is or maybe it is just fictional. Benton Road and Pease Road Hill are good names for the areas.

What part I liked best: Almost bumping into a surprise doe jogging and saying she is beautiful. I drove past one every morning and I named her Felicia. Chatting with the cardinals. I like the descriptions of the scenery. Sweet smelling blossoms. Houses with large gardens,. The sun and the hills. I feel like I was jogging here, too.

Overall Impression: The roads most often taken. Enjoying seeing the doe and birds and the different roads. It seems like you saw more of the land by jogging rather then jogging. Creative an d colorful. A good style and easy to follow as this holds the reader's attention. Looks like you spent time with this. Good call.

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