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Hi Gervic

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Behind the Green Door

First Impression: Gervic's been busy. I love poetry so I couldn't pass on reading. I enjoyed the imagery in the stanzas and how they were like a prequel to the danger ahead. Good descriptors in every stanza and the rhyming pattern added a sense of impending doom ahead. Nicely told. I noted this was a contest entry because under mystery was two other pieces with the same title.

What needs your attention: Its a free style poem with four-line stanzas that work very well, nothing needs changing in this reader's mind.

What part I liked best: I enjoyed all of the poem but if I had to pick a particular stanza the creaking hinge, a chilling sigh reminds me of my aunt's old house every door creaked differently. It was fun just to open them to hear the creaks. My aunt didn't agree with our antics but then what adult actually likes annoying behavior.

Overall impression: The visual movement in the story added suspense as the reader read. The final stanza left the reader wondering what would cause the end. Nicely done. The pacing worked very well.

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