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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Gaby

A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Hi: I am Megan, one of the sly foxes.

Title: Driving To The East Coast

First Impression: I saw that you wrote for The Writers Cramp. I have read your poems and stories before so I had no problem jumping in to check this out. Spring time. Cherry blossoms. A few words here but a few words are all you need to tell story or a poem. I am here. I decided to go with my instincts and read this. Good introduction in the beginning.

What needs your attention: Maybe you could have included descriptions of Korea. Like the flowers and trees and if there is a body of water near by as well as birds and squirrels. A rhyme pattern would have been nice but this worked out as well.

What part I liked best: The cherry blossoms. Stopping off for a chat. Getting coffee. Spending time with someone and relaxing. We. I assume you mean your wife. This is in the spring time. Some good reflections and I felt peaceful as I read this.

Overall Impression: A good scenario. This is creative and colorful. Serene. A spring time day that is warm brings out the best in a person. Easy to follow and I could see the cherry blossoms. A good presentation like always.

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