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Review #4742121
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 A Sudanese Century Plant’s Dream Open in new Window. [E]
A new American lives a century plant lifecycle.
by debmiller1 Author Icon
Review by Lovina Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi debmiller1 -

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The reason I chose this particular story/poem: I chose this piece because I found the description intriguing.

My opinion of said story/poem: A little more explanation about why he wouldn't be able to return to America would be helpful. As a naturalized citizen, he has the right to return, unless, you are referring to the Sudanese government not allowing him to return. I don't know anything about the Sudanese government, so I won't even hazard a guess as to why he wouldn't be allowed to return after being granted a work visa.

Even though this is a work of fiction the whys and wherefores do matter.

I know there are usually word limits for these short pieces, but some small details usually enhance a story, giving it a more realistic feel.

Next is the century plant. I think I heard of a century plant once, somewhere. So, of course, I had to go look it up. Not only have I heard of them, I've seen them! I just didn't know their name. Thank you for that.

In the seventh paragraph you state "every century planted bloomed once", I think you wanted "every century plant bloomed once".

Conclusion: Your story contained no spelling errors making it easy to read and you kept a good pace making it a joy to read. Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina

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