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Review #4741904
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The Tale of Peter Piglet Open in new Window. [E]
April 2023 entry for the Bard's Hall contest. (Winner)
by Dave Ryan Author Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Consider this a congratulatory fluff review *BigSmile* I thought this was the cutest and funniest thing when Lilli made me read it *Wink* It has a warmly humorous style which is gently ironic while maintaining decency and still being a pretty good story to actually read to kids, as a lesson in sitting quietly *Laugh* I can picture the cute little animals and the kids interrupting with their questions, which are actually pretty good questions except that it’s a fairytale and the guy should tell them they need to “suspend disbelief” or whatever we adults like to say about make believe stories…

You didn’t mention how many words it actually is, only that it had a 500 word limit. You might as well include the word count just to have it there, unless it’s been embellished since the original contest. Remember, word counts are crucial to any contest entry, and forming the habit of including them is always good. And as a totally boring formatting suggestion, I would center all the award stuff at the bottom of the page. Merit Badges look nice when they’re centered. Also, it looks like you’ve maintained the default font size. If it’s a children’s story, it’s even more important to use a generous font size. I set everything at 4 myself, to ensure readability across devices and age groups.

Other than that, I’ve got nothing to say. Good work!

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