Hi dragonwoman -

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The reason I chose this particular story/poem: The title caught my attention, I was curious about what the new philosophy could be that meant you didn't have to study.

My opinion of said story/poem: Quite interesting for such a small piece, except for one little problem - you left me hanging! What was his grade?!

In the second and third paragraph, you have two people talking to each other, short sentences. In the second you have "he answered" and in the third you have "he asked". Maybe you could change the third to "the teacher asked" or "Mr. Whatshisname asked" to eliminate any confusion.

Towards the end you have the students marking the papers, where did they get the answers? If they had the answers all this time, why bother with the quiz? You may want to have Mr. Whatshisname post the answers somewhere once the quiz is done.

The second to last paragraph is a bit confusing, almost as if you intended to add more words in there somewhere, like, maybe, his grade.

Conclusion: I hate being left hanging, just my personal pet peeve which in no way affects your writing.

I realize you hit the word count limit, flash fiction is a difficult thing to write, which accounts for the bits I pointed out. You managed to get your point across in the small word count allowed, well done.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




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