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A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

Hi Carol

Title: The Legend Of Jack O'Lantern

My name is Megan, one of the sly foxes.

First Impression: I like pumpkins, orange and white. I knew this was a poem about a pumpkin so I like Halloween items. I decided to read this. I know your writing doesn't disappoint. I smiled and read the first line. I met Jack. He drove all the pumpkins bats. I am in. I wan to read about Jack. He sounded cute.

What needs your attention: Looks like you got this. Dracula could have adopted this pumpkin and let it guard his casket. Just a thought. Seems like Jack had it handled.

What part I liked best: The ghost became the whiner and Jack was the hero. The ghost got the witch's hat and her cat. The rhyme pattern made this entertaining and I was happy as I read this.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed the rhyme pattern. I like the cat and the ghost. A fun read and looks like you had fun with this. I am ready for Halloween after reading this. I wondered if the black cat dances. This poem has something for everyone who likes Halloween. Creative, a good style and entertaining.

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