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 Then and Now (actively editing) Open in new Window. [E]
A woman (me) reflects on her life ... past and present ... then and now.
by MJones I Survived Another Year Author Icon
Review by Lornda Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Sun* I found your poem with the 'Read & Review' feature! I enjoyed reading it, and I thought the title and description fit the poem perfectly. I don't write a lot of poetry, but I can imagine to write a whole life story into it must be a hard thing to do. I liked how it was structured, and how it slowly went through the painful experience as a child right down to today. Well done!

*Sun* I don't have a lot of feedback, but I did have to pause here and there because sometimes the verses melded together like one long sentence. I think it's because of having no capital letters to start each stanza. Other than that, I thought the rhyming moved it along at a good pace, and it didn't seemed forced.

*Sun* Overall, a beautiful poem, which describes not the best time in one's life, but it's full of emotion, and I could certainly feel that as I read a long. In the 'Then' part of the poem, I really liked how you bolded the 'I' for emphasis. The word choice was excellent to get us to feel the emotion. I felt it the strongest at the end section here: I’ll open the door.... From here, the emotion got even stronger to describe the pain even as an adult, and the last line is perfect! Keep up the great work. *Stary*

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