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Revelation Open in new Window. [ASR]
An unusual kind of revelation, prompted by a bible verse.
by winklett Author Icon
Review of Revelation  Open in new Window.
Review by GERVIC Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Greetings winklett Author IconMail Icon!

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window.. This is in response to a mystery task brought by The Raven "The Raven - 1"  Open in new Window.. I found your poem on the Read and Review section of this site and I enjoyed reading it. Hence, this review. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


"Revelation" is a vivid poem that evokes powerful imagery and invites multiple interpretations. Through its use of natural elements and vibrant colors, it creates a sense of a submerged world beneath an all-encompassing sky.


Imagery and Structure

The poem is divided into two distinct stanzas, each with a central focus. The first stanza centers on the speaker's experience:

Submersion: The sea "covered me completely." The imagery establishes a sense of being overwhelmed or lost.

Natural Entanglement: The lines "seaweed wrapped around my head / in even circles of cyan and sapphire" reinforces the feeling of being trapped, but also hints at a beautiful, almost hypnotic quality.

The Canvas: The references to a canvas and galleries suggest an artistic transformation of a natural experience, inviting questions of perspective and interpretation.



The second stanza shifts focus to "you":

Celestial imagery: "whose dress was the sun" creates a figure of immense power and radiance, a being of the heavens in contrast to the speaker's immersion within the sea.

The Artist: This stanza directly introduces the idea of an artist as a force who "captures" and "strokes" the scene onto a "soft sky."
Contradiction: The final lines introduce a sense of duality within the sun-figure. They offer "brilliance" but also "betrayal," suggesting complexity.



Themes

Several themes emerge from the poem's stark imagery:

Perspective: The poem contrasts the speaker's personal experience of being overwhelmed by the sea with the artist's depiction of the scene. Who controls the narrative?

Nature and Transformation: The natural world is both powerful and confining. Yet, even in its overwhelming dominance, it can be transmuted into art.

Power and Vulnerability: The sun-clad figure is majestic, yet tinged with betrayal. This suggests an exploration of power dynamics between individuals, or between humankind and the natural world.



Interpretation

"Revelation" leaves room for the reader's own interpretation based on the themes outlined above. Here are a few possibilities:

Environmental: The poem could be read as an ecological statement on humanity's precarious position within the powerful forces of nature.

Personal: It may be a metaphor for an overwhelming emotional or psychological experience, contrasted with the external perspective that seeks to shape and define it.

Feminist: It could explore the contrasting portrayals of masculine and feminine power, particularly in how they're depicted via natural imagery.



Overall

"Revelation" is a short but impactful poem. It blends sensory details, vibrant colors, and contrasting perspectives to create a lingering sense of unease and wonder. Thank you so much for this wonderful and awe-inspiring piece. Write on!



Best regards,
Gervic

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