Hi Vicki Lynne -

This is a "Game of Thrones"  review.

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The reason I chose this particular story/poem: I found the title very interesting as I too have always been told everything comes in threes, so much so, I find myself keeping track whenever something bad happens. So far, it always comes in threes.

My opinion of said story/poem: This is more of a memoir than a story, with a detailed sequence of events told in a matter-of-fact manner. This play-by-play type of writing left things a bit bland. There are a lot of exciting events taking place but you do not take advantage of this. It might help to think of it as another story. Add in some imagery: the weather, the landscape, smells, textures. A lot of descriptions in order to help the reader see and feel the events for themselves.

Also, you mention in your description that everything happens in threes, but it is only mentioned in passing in your work. Did you believe in the myth of threes prior to these events? Were you worried after the second vehicle mishap that there would be a third? Were you nervous that maybe it would be "the one"? You could put all of these feelings and anxieties into your piece to draw the reader in.

Conclusion: This is a well-thought-out, detailed, sequence of events that could be oh so much more.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




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