Hi AngelArchiver -

This is a "Game of Thrones"  review.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinions and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

The reason I chose this particular story/poem: As I was scrolling through your port I found that all of the entries were sections of the same story, so, I decided I should start at Section 1.

My opinion of said story/poem: First off, the title of this piece clearly states that it is Section 1 and there are no stories in your port before this one, but the authors note at the top states that this is part two. Dare I assume you decided not to offer up part one on writing.com, so you renamed part two as Section 1? If so, is part one now redundant? If everything important from the very first story has been integrated into the other parts then one is no longer necessary and part two is indeed now one.

Second, the second paragraph of the green edits has one typo: instead of "will not sent any" you probably wanted "will not send any".

As for my thoughts, I was a bit shocked at the direction you went with this. I had no idea where you were headed, highly unusual, and pleasantly surprised. I do enjoy a good twist in the story and you did not disappoint.

Conclusion: I truly enjoyed the read. I loved not having to deal with typos (good job on the editing) and I found myself thoroughly engrossed in the tale. Well done!

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




Your work was rated using the guidelines from:

Comment-In-A-Box  (E) My view on and methods of rating items on Writing.Com. #544247 by The StoryMistress

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