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Review #4741362
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 Survival  Open in new Window. [E]
Talking about the homelessness and what todo these days
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE ESSAY

A look at homeless. The author shares his thought on homeless, possible causes, choices, and how one choice can make a difference in your life.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the tone of the essay. It wasn't accusatory or "woe is me," but a thoughtful look at what causes homelessness and what can be done. Ultimately, it comes down to the choices one makes. Seeking the choice to pick oneself out of homelessness requires a lot of courage and then will power to follow through.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a paragraph formatted essay.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest the use of WDC ML to make the font bigger so it would be easier to read for the reader.

*Star* EMOTIONAL CONNECTION

The author speaks in a tone that allows for an emotional connection with the reader. He sheds light on a problem that many might not understand to include the causes, drugs and gambling. The piece is poignant and very introspective.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Genuine, heartfelt, and honest. The title is reflective of the content. I have no suggestions for improvement.


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Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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