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A Review From The Iron Bank Of Braavos

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Hi Foxtale

My name is Megan, one of the sly foxes.

Title: Smokey's Lesson

First Impression: I am reading about a bear and a Boy Scout Troop. I was a Girl Scout so I am interested in stories about Boy Scouts. I like bears so I was drawn to this. I figured it would hold my interest. It didn't disappoint. The woods make for a good setting. I like Smokey, the Bear. I saw the real Smokey, the Bear when I was a kid at the zoo. I was ready to read this.

What needs your attention: I thought Smokey the bear was really there. It was a head of a bear and this was confusing for me. It was a joke on the one Scout Master. I was hoping for a real bear and I didn't want anyone to get hurt. I just wanted a nice black bear to visit. Maybe a real bear could appear but just run off but keep the joke bear head in the story.

What part I liked best: The man laughing and saying they could teach the bear to use a rake. Well rounded characters and suitable dialogue. A god style and this holds the reader's interest. The guy thinking it was a decapitated bear. There is some humor here. I like that.


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