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 Review #4741073 |
 | Unexpected Gift  [ASR] Miriam gets a surprise gift in the mail.  |
| (4.5)| Hi IdaLin  This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. What I liked:  This is a lovely tale of love through the years. It's a great premise for a story. A woman receives a gift in the mail. It was sent almost fifty years previously. A diamond ring from the man who hoped to gain her hand in marriage. It really tugged at my heartstrings. I felt so sorry for Miriam when I learned that Jonathan died under enemy fire in Vietnam. So he never got to propose properly, and Miriam never got her second change at love. I know she said she wouldn't marry anyone else, but I have a feeling Jonathan might have changed her mind. The direction you took with the story prompts is fantastic. They are four seemingly unrelated items, but you have woven them together seamlessly. They fit really well and complement one another. My favourite is the orange tabby cat, Liza. You sketched this cat really well. By showing her around Miriam's feet, and then jumping up onto the counter and wagging her tail, you make her come alive. I must say you create a good deal of suspense and intrigue. Seeing Miriam unsure about opening the gift, then deciding to go for it, and then the letter falling out, you really do keep your readers on a hook, waiting to find out what the gift is and who it is from. I wondered, at one point, if the gift would explode. Suggestions: I wasn't sure about why Elizabeth, Miriam's neighbour, disliked Liza the cat so much. She kind of scowls at her and watches her while she's climbing the stairs. At first, I thought Liza would turn out to be evil, or even an evil person inside her cat's body. But she wasn't. Which I was happy about. But I just didn't understand why the tension. It isn't explained further at any point, so I wondered whether it was necessary. Parting comments: This is a lovely, little story that was a pleasure to read. Great characters in Miriam and Liza, and I was so happy with the ending. Even though it was sad. also. But it's really well written. Happy WDC Account Anniversary! Choconut    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/05/2024 @ 12:18pm EDT