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 Review #4741061 |
 | The Woman Inside of Me...  [] The Woman Inside of Me...  |
| Hi Mistress K , This review was written on behalf of House Targaryen as part of "Game of Thrones" ! Disclaimer The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. What I liked:  What I like the most is how self-accepting and self-loving this poem is. The woman inside you steps in whenever she is needed to steer you in the right direction, or to provide comfort and support when you need some. As I read, I kept thinking that it sounds as though you have gone through some difficult times previously, but you have overcome them, and in the process, you have learned how important it is to look after yourself and trust yourself. I think that is something that most women go through at some point. A lot of men, too. So that makes the poem really relatable. I loved how this poem put a huge smile on my face. Reading lines like, "I am strong and with every experience, I get stronger," is delightful. Because you are right. We do learn from our experiences, and they do help us to grow. This is another line that jumps out at me: "STOPS…THINKS… And Responds accordingly." This poem kind of reads like prose poetry. It is something I am no expert in, but this makes me think of that form. It makes your voice come through as though you are sitting next to me, telling me of the things you have learned over the years. The rhythm is okay. There's no set rhythm that builds up through the poem, but it reads fluidly, nonetheless. I love the repetition of the words "The woman inside of me" at the start of each verse. The end then goes on to say that the woman you want to be is the woman inside of you. Which means you're already there, and you should take comfort and solace in that fact.Suggestions: My suggestions are grammar / typo related. "Calm, cool, and collect" - It should be "collected." Also, "Ready for any life’s curve balls thrown at me" - It should be " ...any of life's curveballs ..." Lastly, " ...begging to be release ..." - It should be "released." Parting comments: I enjoyed reading your poem very much. As a woman, it is lovely to hear you putting faith in yourself. I'm not sure why it should seem more important for a woman, but it does. And that gives this poem sparkle. Happy Account Anniversary! Choconut    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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