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I see that your poem Overachiever was written for the Writer's Cramp, and I've taken that into consideration in my review. I can see from the bolded words which ones were part of the prompt. I think this is all around solid. Let's get into it!

I think the sense of humour here is cute and works well. You've made good use of the prompted words for this comedic poem. It's certainly a relatable one, I think most of us have felt this way at one point or another! It flows really well, and I'm a fan of the rhyming scheme you have going here, which feels natural while still being playful. There aren't any major spelling or grammar errors, and everything seems to work pretty well together here.

I think the main area in this poem that could use improvement is punctuation. These are only suggestions, it's just what I personally think about poetry in general and this poem in particular. I'm personally a big believer in the idea that poetry doesn't require proper or thorough punctuation, but it does require you to be personally consistent within a single work. With the question marks and exclamation marks you've used here, I think there are some spots that would benefit from commas or periods. In your second line, "Never say I!," I think it would read smoother if you added a comma after "never." I personally stumbled reading this line without the comma. Lines three and four would read smoother as "Plenty to do,/Why reach for the sky?" with the comma and question mark added. Several of the lines ending with no punctuation would read smoother and look more consistent with an added period or comma.

Overall, this is a really solid comedic poem that makes good use of a prompt! I think tidying up the punctuation consistency would really add some polish to it. I hope to read more from your portfolio in the future!


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