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 | Grandma's Pot  [E] There is something about Grandma's pot that makes food cooked in it taste so much better.  |
| (4.5)| Hallo Ametorpe ! I will be reviewing your work "Grandma's Pot" on behalf of "House Targaryen Points" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: This is a story about the narrator's adventures surrounding her Grandmother's cooking pot - a large iron pot used to cook what was once her favorite meal - mpotompoto or yam pottage. Now, what is the reason for the delicious meal no longer being the narrator's favorite? Quite the odd event that happened late one night. Pluses:Dear Writer, I feel and hear you. I grew up in a country just a few doors away from you, and I can relate to everything you've written and described in your story; except for what happens at the end of course.  The description of mpotompoto? Check! We have the same menu, in my country, and it's still one of my favorite dishes in the world. So no, not even the events of the final paragraphs will change my mind on eating it. The sending of the children to spend vacations with the grandparents? Check! I could definitely see myself sleeping on that floor with your cousins, and sitting around the fire watching grandma stir that giant pot filled with delicious smelling pottage. Ah, the memories! You are able to weave threads of nostalgia with your writing, even adding the extra parts that enrich the memories; the telling of the Ananse stories (yes, we even read those in my country), the story of your great-grandfather melting and making new pots out of old and rusted ones, and of course the introduction of the 'Black Ninja' whose exploits were always fun for the children in the village. The addition of him being a drunkard was a realistic torch that I can relate to as well. Turns out that the Black Ninja would end up stealing the show at the end of this tale, for what he did on a drunken night to your grandmother's pot...it's no wonder you no longer want to eat the food anymore. However, a part of me wishes you had spilled the beans and let them know the truth though. Surely you must have told someone what happened, right? Yes? Suggestions:Not much to complain about. Perhaps to emphasize the word 'mpotompoto' in italics and to try avoiding starting sentences with the word 'But' as much as possible.    Overall, this was an interesting story to read and one that conjured up memories of my childhood as well. Thanks for sharing and keep on writing!   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/02/2024 @ 11:42am EDT