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 | 'Middle-age Spread' is NOT a Condiment  [18+] I stepped on the scale. What was I thinking?  |
| (4.5)| Hello Victoria! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" .  You're hilarious! You definitely have a knack for writing comedy. I chuckled all the way throughout the piece. Your struggle with those stubborn nine-pounds shows strongly through your words. Even though you keep a comical perspective, your frustration is easily felt. When your husband caught you telling off your excess weight, I laughed out loud. The setting was described nicely and helped me envision each scene as I read. I truly felt for you. I can relate. Though, I wish nine-pounds was all I had to lose! We won't go into just how much I do need to take off!  The emotion of your writing is strong, and the pace is fabulous. The reader gets to know a part of your personality through the dialogue you have with yourself (and the middle-aged spread)! Your title and description is perfect and funny. It drew me right in. I do have a few suggestions below. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  hips and thighs.hips, and thighs.  I zipper my pantsI zipped my pants  over indulgenceoverindulgence  And still And still,  of courseof course,  cleaning, running cleaning, and running  Well those daysWell, those days  everydayevery day I hope the suggestions helped. Thanks for sharing your piece and bringing me a smile and a chuckle!   Intuey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister   The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/01/2024 @ 6:24pm EDT