Hi Ifunanya -

This is a "Game of Thrones"  review.

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The reason I chose this particular story/poem: The title, which turns out, isn't the title! Instead of "A Hunting Tale" I think it's supposed to be "A Haunting Tale". Still good, but the "Hunting Tale" was what intrigued me.

My opinion of said story/poem: The writing is good, had to get that out there before I get to the rest.

This reads like a story outline. With the chapter breaks and quick excerpts, it appears like it is meant to be a much bigger story.

In the second paragraph of chapter 2, you have a line about the whispers of a ghost and then you talk about voices. Shouldn't it be the whispers of ghosts, plural? You do the same thing in chapter 4, calling them a vengeful spirit and then lost souls. Singular then plural.

Lastly, ya roped me in then left me hanging! What happened? Why were they there? You can't just state there was unfinished business and not tell me what it was! I do hate stories that have no ending.

Conclusion: The writing is good, no spelling errors, but, no ending either. Just saying that Sarah broke the cycle and brought them peace does not conclude the story. The whys and wherefores need to be in there somewhere, otherwise, what's the point? The whys and hows are usually the most juicy bits of the tale.

It's a great start, keep going.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina




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