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| GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW This is a review for "Invalid Item"  from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones" The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  THE POEMDoes being an overachiever disadvantage others?  WHAT I LIKEDThe poem tackles a very topical subject for the modern day and challenges the reader to look at the differences between the overachiever and the jobless. Is there a middle ground? Could the unemployed storyteller have been more tactful in getting his point across? Would that have kept him the job? Questions to ponder.  STRUCTUREThis is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme. MECHANICSI did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There is a (") after matches your character which seems oddly placed. DESCRIPTIONSThe descriptions are very "to the point," for example -- "he stares at me." In that regard, the descriptions do a good job of matching the harsh tone of the poem. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONSThe poem is easy to read. The mood of the poem is somber. No likes losing a job. The poem reflects the reality of life. Even friends, who gifted with an advantage, find it a struggle to think of others when money is involved. "Money makes people funny" is an expression that rings true time and time again. Another thing I thought of - when two sides are polar opposite, how can there be reconciliation? Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen  
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You responded to this review 04/02/2024 @ 2:39am EDT