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| (4.5)| Hello Allen Mitchell! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" . This is a well-written piece that made me chuckle. You did a wonderful job with the characters. I loved the sister. She wasn't going to put up with any nonsense whatsoever! Her strong-willed, yet caring personality shined through.The priest was hilarious in his accidental drama of playing a poltergeist. He was a natural at getting the job done.  The story had a great, believable plot, which flowed nicely. The Ouija board setting was perfect. It reminded me of my time as a kid with my friends. The Ouija board was popular back then. Little did we know how dangerous they can actually be! I liked the way they went back in time, and returned to their timeline. It was a creative and different twist to an age-old story situation. I do have a few minor recommendations. Please use or discard them as you see fit.  Along with your two genre categories of "Comedy" and "Ghost", I'd delete "Other" and put "Drama" or "Action/Adventure". The more categories you have listed the more visitors you may get. A lot of people look for items to read by searching categories.   floor and rustle floor and the rustle  Whoa she meant business. Whoa, she meant business.  While your piece is indented to show new paragraphs, you may want to consider adding spaces between paragraphs. This gives the reader a place to rest their eyes. Thank you so much for sharing your piece with us. I look forward to reading more of your work! I enjoyed my visit.  Intuey"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister  The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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