Greetings Noël Freeman !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


Strong Imagery: This poem does a fantastic job of showcasing the imbalance of power in this predator-prey relationship. The use of words like "aimless", "small", and "grey" for the rodent contrasts beautifully with the Feline's portrayal as a "shadow" – emphasizing its stealth and hidden power. The juxtaposition reinforces the inevitability of the conflict.

Exploration of Theme: The poem invites reflection on the perspectives of both the powerful and the powerless. The Rodent's naive wandering underscores its lack of awareness of the danger it faces. On the other hand, the Feline's silent efficiency speaks to the cold pragmatism of the natural world. This focus on perspective invites the reader to consider larger questions about survival and power dynamics.

Rhythm and Cadence: The poem's consistent meter has a lulling quality. It almost mirrors the Rodent's obliviousness, drawing the reader along toward the inevitable climax. The occasional rhymes add to this sense of building tension, with words like "pouring" and "goring" adding to the distinct imagery.

Potential for Interpretation: The poem's ending raises further questions. The Feline's casual disregard for both its kill and the Rodent's questioning words could symbolize a variety of concepts. Does this represent the indifference of a powerful force or the futility of fighting against a stronger opponent? The open-endedness allows for multiple readings and engages the reader on a deeper level.

Ultimately, it's critical to acknowledge that the graphic nature of the poem may be disturbing to some readers. The unflinching focus on violence serves the thematic exploration but may make the piece unsuitable for certain audiences. And this for me should be rated 18+. Despite this, the poem is still enjoyable to read especially for readers who prefer this type of genre.

Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Write on!


Best regards,
Gervic