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 The Sea  [E]
Poem about the Sea
by maggie
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Brilliant!

I came to your portfolio because it's your WDC Anniversary - and I'm so glad I got to read this poem!

I love the imagery and the skillful way you interweave nature and human emotion. To start with, the poem could be about anyone, and then you narrow it down to yourself and one particular feeling. You describe how to respond to and cope with that feeling using the metaphor of the sea. Superbly done.

A special mention of 'bluer than blue' followed by 'newer than new' - brought a big smile to my face.

Suggestion: The title and brief description somehow don't seem to live up to the poem. While it's your piece and you decide what works, I think one of your lines - 'the tide turns' would make a good description to intrigue the reader to click.

Also, I'd suggest a bit more WritingML like font, size and maybe colour.

Thanks for sharing this powerful poem!

Write On!
- Sonali

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