Hello strlcuckoo

I came across your poem as you sent me a review request

Here are my thoughts on your poem -

First Impressions

I thought it rhymed and flowed very well and I liked the format. It has an ethereal quality talking about the sirens (assuming this means sirens as in mythical creatures rather than emergency vehicles!)

Imagery and Theme

The poem seems to indicate the writer is far from home and finds that "home" is calling him, interpreted by the sirens. It leaves me a bit unsure of why the writer longs to go home, what the secrets are, and why no-one cares to hear them. I feel the poem tells part of the story but leaves out a lot, although perhaps this is purposeful.


Form

The poem is written in an ABCB rhyming schemes and I found no faults with the rhymes here.

Favourite Bits

I liked the first verse the best, and the image of the sirens calling the writer home.

Suggestions

Too many days have past - should this be PASSED rather than PAST?

Conclusion

I thought this poem was well written in terms of how it flowed and the imagery used, although it did not entirely convey to me the writers story and what it was getting at.








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