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 Aglow in the Moment  [E]
An eight minute journey and an endless trek.
by T.S. Garp
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What an intriguing piece! A completely new way of describing what would otherwise have been an ordinary scene, highlighting each element and tacitly reflecting someone's personality.

I read it twice to make sure I hadn't missed anything! *Rolling* I'm still not sure, though. *Think*

The title and brief description work. The opening sentence confused me a bit. Eight minutes BEFORE it came into the room, or eight minutes within the room?

The note at the conclusion helped understand the context.

Suggestion: WritingML - font, size, line-space.

Write On!
- Sonali

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