An Angel Army Review Hi MJones . I'm Polter-JACE: Cruising ... , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "What Now" , which I found on the Read & Review featture. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. I'm primarily a short story and essay writer. I dabble in writing poetry and have dipped my toe in the waters of reviewing poetry. I love trying out new forms. Honestly, I chose to review your offering because I didn't understand the form you used. I was intrigued ... and then I realized that the numbers you included (3.16.2024) were NOT part of the prompt; they were the date you wrote your poem. May I suggest you delete those numbers while citing the prompt? It IS distracting since you posted that in two separate places. As for your poem--I found you followed the Topic listed very well. It happens to mirror perfectly the actions of a newly-born calf. (I happened to watch the movie City Slickers last night for context of my thought.) What now, indeed? Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. No issues noted in this section. I tend to leave punctuation in poetry to the authors devices. My Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. Reviewed by JACE My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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