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 Shadow Over July Open in new Window. [13+]
A taste of memory lane alongside an unsteady future.
by Gaby Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

July is a steady month - known for summer and vacations, but as memories fade, just how steady was it?

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the visuals the poem evoked. Simple, yet succinct word play puts the reader in the moment.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There was no set rythme patterns.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "as the skies cast shadows over July."

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. With few words the author conveys vivid visuals and evokes emotions well. Everyone thinks of July as summer. It's time to enjoy the nice weather, play, go on vacations, and yet, every so often, carefree summer can be haunted by shadows. While the poem hints at weather changes and life obligations, I think uncertainty can be whatever is challenging you in your own life. It's this juxapostion, well done, that dares the reader to go deeper.

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