Hello Cinderella!

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I loved your username when I saw it today and found this emotional poem of yours and enjoyed it so decided to give you a review. I hope you enjoy this celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.



INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I thought this poem was a beautiful tribute to your father. Your love for him is beautiful and admirable. Well done! And my heart goes out to you and your family on your loss.

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Well done!



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

This stanza was my favorite, because I loved the idea of you being his tributary and carrying on the best parts of him and having them flow out to others.
"Me
your tributary
will continue your lead
flowing steady and level
controlling my speed." Beautiful. Well done!


I really loved your last stanza in this poem too. It's perfect and beautiful. I think it concludes the poem in a great and uplifting way. I commend you for finding the silver lining despite your grief. Many people never get to such a healthy place. Well done!

If you haven't already entered this lovely, emotional poem of yours in Rachel's (user name purplesunday) "Shadows and Light" contest here on writing.com, I encourage you to do so. It's free to enter. I usually enter too, and me recommending you to enter this poem means I won't win, but the best poem *should* win so I want you to enter. If you're not familiar with the contest, it is a free-verse poetry contest that runs monthly. I think it goes from the 15th of the current month to the 14th of the following month.

I liked how you brought this beautiful tribute poem full circle from the first to last stanza. I think that heightened the emotion at the end. Well done!

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your beautiful poem. Well done!

Your tribute poem was interesting to me, felt like it was coming straight from your heart and soul, and made me offer a prayer for peace and comfort for you and your family. Well done!



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's perfect as it is. Well done!

The only thing I can recommend has nothing to do with the poem, but is from the description. I went to look up "Uglimukluk" but my dictionary didn't have an entry for it. The closest they came to was "ugly mug." I doubt that's what you meant? Maybe create a notes section below the poem to explain this for future readers. And if you want to share with me, I'd be interested in knowing.



CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and gift for poetry and I enjoyed reading beautiful, emotional tribute poem. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time, heart, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler



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