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 | Photographic Memory  [E] An interesting object in the middle of nowhere inspires a photographer ... then a writer.  |
| (4.5)| Greetings, MJones Transforming … Again . I'm Jace, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Photographic Memory" for the "~ The Poet's Place Cafe~" group.   Form. I don't know if this poem aligns witha specific form but it consists of five two-line stanzas each with a a-a rhyme. The poem uses a photograph for a prompt Overall Impression. First, I thought the photograph was a powerful image, worthy of a thoughtful poem. Your poem is a testament to this image and to all who read it.You are right--that rusted vehicle IS the focal point for both your image and the poem.  Technical or Editorial Considerations. I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your poem.  I had a problem with reading your first line. I found it awkward to read. The word "so" is the problem. Either of the following works: You catch my eye so, with a single click You catch my eye with a single click Favorite Part. Your picture. Rating. 4.5.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinions.Reviewed by JACE  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" . My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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