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Ocean Fling  [E]
The mysterious disappearance of a sailboat from its mooring inspires a playful poem.
by MJones
Review of Ocean Fling  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

What a charming poem. It speaks about the missing boat in loving relationship metaphor that feels like a 70's song. I really enjoyed it.

I'll give my usual formatting recommendation of size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices, and adding a line count in case you want to enter this into a contest. There are several poetry contests around here that take previously written submissions, and this is definitely good enough. You can find them listed in the Contests page under Community in the right hand sidebar.

I have nothing to offer by way of improvement of the poem itself. For me, poetry is a highly subjective art form, and as long as the lines flow reasonably well and one has put their heart into the work, I don't bother much about meter and syllables.

I'm sure you've already been told about the importance of choosing three relevant genres, for there they all are. It helps others find your work when browsing, and also gives more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award.

This is a cute and artistic poem, and I'll make an additional suggestion I don't often think of: it deserves a cover art of some kind. You can make really lovely images for free using AI art generators, anything from abstract watercolors to elegant oil paintings. I always use square images to best utilize the given area.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Boat*


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