Greetings sindbad !

This is your fourth day port raid as part of you "A Week of Port Raid Package" from "Magical Express Delivery Wagon"  gifted to you by your Secret Valentine. May you'll find this review an inspiring and encouraging one.

Without much a do, here are the things I found out after reading your offering:

The poem's portrayal of death and cleansing hints at a powerful acceptance of natural processes. Nature is presented as a force in a constant state of regeneration, where endings make way for new beginnings. You could build on this further by considering this natural law as an expression of love or care: something harsh on the surface, but ultimately serving life itself. This adds a subtle depth to the mother figure – she fosters growth even when it demands painful transformations.

There's an undercurrent in the poem suggesting that all creation possesses seeds of greatness. This resonates in lines such as "Evolution gives credence to finer life worth" and "Intelligent, the mind understands everything." Consider highlighting how the mother figure doesn't merely create, but nurtures a capacity for the extraordinary within her creations. Her role extends to fostering autonomy, intellect, and an ability to shape themselves and the world around them.

An appreciation for the sacred and unexplained permeates the poem. Descriptions like 'Resurrections of Her presence clean’ hold a mystical quality. Emphasizing this could create a profound, spiritual aura around creation. This isn't about organized religion, but a deep curiosity about the unseen power within life. Lean into imagery that conveys a feeling of awe – celestial references, light symbolism, or a sense of boundless, transformative energy.

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Overall, this is a great read and I enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you so much for sharing this to us. Keep your creative juices flowing and continue to inspire everyone around. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic