Jules Mile

I see the list of characters at the beginning of the installment. I found it helpful.

However, Jules Mile and other names were not part of the list.

- Jules Mile
- Oliva
--------- Meat --------- Is Meat a different Character or is Mest mispelled as Meat?
- Tyrone
- Imposter Queen


Queen / Sister

There are two queens. The True Queen and the False Queen.

It gets confusing knowing which Queen is being referred to.

Since the two Queens are Sisters, I suggest to avoid referring to the other Queen as Sister. They are too similar and these words just make identification more difficult.

Based on the previous installment (the poem), I believe that
- Queen Marissa is the Good Queen or the True Queen.
- Queen Oliva is the False Queen put into power by the Viceroy.


Confusing Characters and Settings

There are too many characters towards the end of the chapter. I was unable to follow the conversation. I'm also not certain whether Meat and Mest are the same character or two different characters. I'm also not sure if Queen Marissa is the Good Queen or the Bad Queen.


Sentence Structure

- There were suggestions, ... ...

- There were notices, ... ...
- There were announcements, ... ...
- There were investigations, ... ...
- There were whispers, ... ...

"Suggestions" may not be the best word. What may "suggestions" refer to?

Perhaps:
- "Notices"
- "Announcements"
- "Investigations"
- "Whispers"


- I want this to stop from continuing on in the kingdom.

- I want this to stop from continuing on in the kingdom.
- I want the killing to stop from continuing on in the kingdom.
- I want the deaths to stop from continuing on in the kingdom.


- The queen argued with the rulings ... ...

- The queen dismissed the rulings ... ...
- The queen ignored the rulings ... ...

Best Section

The queen was worried about ... ...   ... ...Her hands lay in her lap.

I enjoyed this section the most. It was still confusing to read however, the description of the clothing and way the Queen moved and behaved was very picturesque. I enjoyed imagining what the Queen might look like.


Missing Merchants

I liked reading about the killer's reaction to the bounty.

The killer has a very defiant attitude.


Overall Impression

This is a very vibrant chapter. The Characters, Scenery, and Props gave a very full and dynamic sensation of surroundings and action.

However, towards the end, it was very confusing. Starting with the moment when Meat became part of the story, I did not know who was talking to who. Also, I was not sure who came with who. Also, which person is the Kings Guard?

The part before the end, when the two Queens were being compared with each other was also confusing. I was not sure which Queen was being described. Which Queen was tricked? Which Queen is Oliva? Which Queen is Marissa?