Powerful poem. It is deep and flows very smoothly. You have a good rhyme scheme going and the syllable count seems fluid for the most part. (I think there were some cases in the first and last stanza where the syllable count felt slightly off but it didn't detract from the reading experience.) It was fun to read through as there was definitely a rhythm to it. I like the use of your "Darkness and Emptiness" refrain. You also give some vivid imagery. I like the second Stanza where Darkness and Emptiness get described as a sword as well as the third where they are depicted as companions the narrator is chained to. Some great writing all around.



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