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The rhythm is good in this poem as it tells the story of a ball game. I question the rhyme in the third stanza, might buy move and lose as I reread aloud but voice and force cant find rhyme voice rhymes with choice and force with course but choice and course? No. The way I often check myself. All other rhymeing end line words are good and imagery is strong. Does not mean I have not left the same in my writes, Just my opinion.
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