\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED ITEMS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4725886
Review #4725886
Viewing a review of:
 Season's Lament Open in new Window. [E]
Tis the season, despite the weather.
Review of Season's Lament  Open in new Window.
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
A WDC Power Review


Hi 💘 Richard 💘 Author Icon. Your offering came up on the Read & Review section.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Season's Lament" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I liked your title, and was hooked by your first lines. I like all things about snow, and the cold. No problems with your first stanza, except as noted below.

But I got a bit lost with your second stanza. I didn't see how what you wrote related to the Season or Lament. Your form is good.

When I first joined WDC, I would have agreed with your note--that I don't usually write poetry. But I now believe that anyone can. I've made good inroads to that end. I believe you have the chops to as well.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* Watch your meter, the number of beats per line. A five-first line, four-second line is pretty standard. This meter is easy to read. That said, suggest:   but now I'm too old.   now I'm too old.

*Star* My Rating.  4.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


Reviewed by
JACE

** Image ID #1386062 Unavailable **



*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 01/10/2024 @ 4:59pm EST
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4725886