My Tabby Tiger [E] Felix cuddles up sweetly in the evening, after a big day. |
Hi H❀pe , Welcome to Writing.Com! Overall Impression: I saw that cute cat picture and I just had to read your poem! I, too, have a tabby companion and she is an excellent huntress. Much to my dismay at times. I love how this poem begins with the image of a sweet, innocent cat just tired from his day... and then we learn why his day was busy! It made me smile, though, because one of my cats (I have two) caught a mouse a couple of days ago and, yes, they'll both chase butterflies and moths and other insects. I, too, have ran around the house rescuing small creatures. We have harness-and-lead trained them to prevent them from causing too much chaos and mayhem in the area, but those twitching toes whilst asleep sound all too familiar. I enjoyed the imagery. I think any person who lives with a cat will recognise your descriptions. On the technical side of things, all reads well. Excellent work! Suggestions: I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful! Stanza 1: or maybe its just... 'its' should be it's. Stanza 3: He catches butterflies also. So, I... That 'also' followed immediately by 'so' - like a double so - tripped me up a little. That might be worth playing around with. Perhaps the first line could be He catches butterflies, too. Something along those lines? General Suggestion: You use some punctuation in this poem, for which I am grateful. Punctuation helps the overall clarity and reading experience. I suggest going for full punctuation. That would make it perfect. My Rating: This is a cute, entertaining poem. I was happy to read it! I did have a few suggestions. Nothing major, though. Therefore, I will give your poem a rating of 4.5 out of 5. Orion and I thank you for sharing your work. Write on! Kit My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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