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 Stephen Curry : The greatest shooter Open in new Window. [E]
Stephen Curry.
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Review by Dave Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Greetings, curry-30!

Welcome to our international community of writing enthusiasts. The following observations are offered in the spirit of friendly hospitality and constructive support, but they are nothing more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth.

CONTENT:

You have presented a detailed list of basketball achievements highlighting Mr. Curry's career.

However, your introduction to him as a person is limited to minimal abstract terminology: "charisma, humility, and philanthropic efforts." I believe you could strengthen your audience's connection with him by providing more specific examples, as you did with his professional journey.

VISUAL PRESENTATION:

1. The pale coloring makes it difficult for some of us older folks to read. I recommend that you change the color to a darker hue.

2. I believe you could sharpen the focus and control the pace by adding blank lines between paragraphs to give your readers a better chance to absorb each impression before moving along to the next.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

You seem to be off to a good start on your journalistic career. Write on!

Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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