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 | Summer Harvest  [E] As summer ends and fall begins, the harvest changes. Life follows nature.  |
| (4.5)| Dear Pumpkin Harvest , I discovered your poem, "Summer Harvest" while in consideration of our changing season here in Northeast Wisconsin and enjoyed the read, so wanted to offer my reaction with a review, as a member of the Super Power Reviewer’s group.Your offering beautifully captures the essence of the season through use of vivid imagery and sensory details. I was impacted by how the poem employs a sensory-rich approach, emphasizing the sense of smell and taste to evoke the reader's connection to the summer harvest. The use of simile in "Weaves through the air like embroidery thread" creates a delightful and relatable image, comparing the aroma to a familiar and delicate craft. This style effectively transported me into the scene, allowing a fuller experience about the harvest with this narrator’s charm and appreciation of all things connected to fall.. The seasonal theme is strong and provided a vivid snapshot of summer transitioning into autumn. It speaks to the cyclical nature of the seasons, with summer's abundance giving way to the eventual decay of autumn and the arrival of winter. This thematic exploration of the passage of time and change is a powerful element of the poem. One noteworthy aspect is the use of personification in "Toward autumn's beauty I must run," giving autumn the quality of beauty and agency as if it's a destination to reach. This personification adds depth to the poem and contributes to the overall theme of change. It’s how I like to personify and connect in my nature poetry, to show a romantically driven theme. I thought I could offer some suggestions for improvement, if you decide revision is necessary… *Consistency in Rhyme and Meter* While the poem employs rhyme in some lines, it could benefit from more consistent rhyme and meter to enhance its musicality. For example, consider maintaining a consistent rhyme scheme throughout the poem to create a more rhythmic and harmonious flow. If you lean into something like free verse, a poet could tone down rhyme and bump up with assonance to help with that ear candy. *Expand on Emotions* While the poem effectively paints a sensory picture of the harvest season, it could delve deeper into the emotional aspect of the speaker's connection to summer and the impending change. Exploring the speaker's feelings about the transition from summer to autumn could add emotional depth to the poem. It could relate to childhood or parenting, any romance. *Enhance Closure* The poem ends with the line "Memories of summer will linger," which is a strong note, but it might benefit from a concluding stanza or lines that offer a more satisfying sense of closure or reflection on the harvest season. Much like a haiku, it paints pictures with the words, the ending acts as a pay off by connecting those dots and fully immersing in what it all means, some kind of statement that could impact more fully. To kind of recap, your poetry is a sensory-rich and evocative presence that beautifully captures the essence of the season and the passage of time. I think you’ll find refining rhyme and meter can help for a smooth more musical read. If there’s a possibility, expanding on emotions, and enhancing closure, this poem could further elevate its impact and resonate with readers. This was a pleasure for me to consume and consider for feedback. I appreciate that you shared and entrusted your words with our writing community. Sincerely, Brian Super Power Reviewer   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 10/01/2023 @ 11:04pm EDT