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Review #4713741
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 Destination Open in new Window. [E]
Do you relate? Read and find out. Can’t say anything without spoiling.
by xyxe Author Icon
Review of Destination  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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In regards to: "Destination" Open in new Window. which I found on the public reviewing pages.

Dear xyxe Author Icon,

In the description of your poem that i found on the plug page, you ask the reader if they relate. This teases me to consider.

I’m happy to have discovered your poem. Congrats on capturing the essence of uncertainty and hope in nature's course. I had the overwhelming thought your poem beautifully conveys the universal theme of life's unpredictability.

Of the suggestions i would have for improvement of your great poem include use of poetic devices, reconsideration of length, direction for theme with its nature:

1. Consider expanding on the emotions felt by the personified leaf as it embarks on its journey. This could create a deeper connection with readers.
2. Experiment with different metaphors or descriptive language to evoke even more vivid imagery in your poem.
3. Perhaps explore the idea of fate or destiny further, reflecting on whether the leaf has any control over its path, free will and the human component as it reflects beck on human struggle. This could add another layer of complexity to the narrative.

Im happy to have discovered this illumiating short poem, full of impact from brevity to the connection made to a leaf given human like qualities.

Brian
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