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The Wolf Speaks Open in new Window. [E]
An orphan's journey (under 1000 words)
by Amethyst Angel 🍁🙏 Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I found your story this morning when I was reading your newsfeed post. I noticed it has been reviewed. My thoughts for you here are my personal opinions. Please take what resonates with you and discard the rest.

Overall impression: The Wolf Speaks is an imaginative story. The anthropomorphized wolf is an endearing character as he helps the lost orphan to a better life.

What I liked: The construction of your story is excellent. I liked the first sentence hooking me into the world of the forest. I liked the balance of dialogue and narrative. Good character development stimulated my imagination with your specific descriptions like “Glowing crystal blue eyes.” Another one was the large wolf who was “grizzled with age.” I envisioned these animals as well as the elderly lady who wore “a blue calico dress, with pure white hair in a neat bun.”

Suggestion: I paused reading twice. One time at “scenic overlook” and the second time at “forever home.” Both are modern phrases I doubt existed in the post-Gold Rush timeframe. I thought of replacing the “scenic overlook” with something as we stopped at a precipice looking down far below. The “forever home” could be replaced with something like the warm, loving home where I would live out my days.

I adore this story. It contains an excellent hook, a wonderful creative plot, and memorable characters. You are a gifted writer in the way you put together a believable story that had me completely engaged. I appreciate you showing me, not telling me. the story. It was a pleasure to read.
Great job, Amethyst Angel. I will be back to read more of your work.

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