Hi Kayden

I found your poem touching, your take the reader into a very personal and unique perspective.

The pregnant pauses you allow with those single-word lines of 'but', seem to reveal a difficulty talking about the subject. Which feels like family loyalty wrestling with the poet within that needs to express themselves?

After first read, I read it a second time immediately. You have managed to intrigue.

I would like to see one edit though; in your third line it would read more smoothly to say '...even in looks...' rather than 'even on the looks'.

I look forward to reading more, in the future, from your tender perspective.


Hope